Notes about my Ring Verse Valarin translation

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Words I made up are underlined and bold.

Mitu - Three
Golodor-al - Of an Elf, Noldo. From Quenya "Noldor" (alternate Kuweden is from Quenya "Quendë", Elf)
phela - under. From Valarin "Aþâraphelûn", appointed dwelling
Axazid - Seven. From Adûnaic "hazid, hazad", seven
Axazad-al - Of a Dwarf, Khazâd. From Khuzdul "Khazâd", Dwarf
âxaz-um-âz - Hall-s
raxôn-al - Of stone
Eno - Nine
Adâni-yum-at - For Men. "Adâni" is from Quenya "Atani" and Sindarin "Edain"
turb-ûðân - Fated, doomed
gârâd-ân-at - To die
šâ - One. From Black Speech "ash", one
Pûruz-al - Dark. From Black Speech "burz", dark
Mâxanâz-at Pûruz-al - for the Dark Lord. "Mâxanâz" is Valarin for "Authority"; and "Pûruz" is from Black Speech "burz", dark
ši - in, into. From Black Speech "ishi", in or into
Pûruz-Phelûn-ši - in the Dark Land (in the land of Mordor). "Pûruz" is from Black Speech "burz", dark. "Phelûn" is from Valarin "Aþâraphelûn", appointed dwelling". "Ši" is from Black Speech "ishi", in or into
nû-ši - Where
Âbaþar-um-âz - Shadows. From Vanyarin Quenya "Avaþar", possibly shadows (as it had no Elvish translation, it might be a Valarin loanword)
phelûn-ân - To lie, to dwell, to lurk. "Phelûnân" is from Valarin "Aþâraphelûn", appointed dwelling
ûlûkûz - Them all. From Black Speech "ulûk", them all
ulûz - them. From Black Speech "ul", them
mâxan-ân - To rule. From Valarin "mâxan", authority or authoritative decision
mâxan-ân-at-ûlûkûz - to rule them all (rule-to-them all)
gimab-ân - To find. From Black Speech "gimb-", find (as in "gimbatul")
gimab-ân-ulûz - to find them
aþarâk-ân - To bring. From Black Speech "thrak-", bring (as in "thrakatulûk")
aþarâk-ân-at-ûlûkûz - to bring them all (bring-to-them all)
a3a - And. From Black Speech "agh", and
pûruzum - darkness. From Black Speech "burzum", darkness
girimaph-ân - To bind. From Black Speech "krimp-", bind (as in "krimpatul")
girimaph-ân-ulûz. to bind them

Suffixes:

-um (before a -z ending) - (plural)
-at - to (a purpose), for. From Black Speech "-at" (as in "durbatulûk"), to (a purpose)
-al - (adjective) From Valarin "amanaišal", unmarred
-ûðân - (past tense) From Valarin "dušamanûðân", marred
-ân - (present tense) From Valarin "dušamanûðân", marred
-um - "-ness". From Black Speech "-um", -ness

Ring Verse in Valarin

Mitu anaškadum mâxanumâzat Golodoral* phela šebeth,
Axazid mâxanumâzat Axazadal âxazumâz-ši raxônal,
Eno Adâniyumat turbûðân gârâdânat,
šâ Mâxanâzat Pûruzal Mâxallam-pûruz-ši
Pûruz-Phelûn-ši nûši Âbaþarumâz phelûnân.

šâ naškad mâxanânatûlûkûz,
šâ naškad gimabânulûz,
šâ naškad aþarâkânatûlûkûz,
A3a pûruzum-ši girimaphânulûz.

Pûruz-Phelûn-ši nûši Âbaþarumâz phelûnân.

Literal translation:

Three-ring-s authorit-ies-for Elf (Noldo) under air,
Seven authorit-ies-for Dwarf hall-s-in stone,
Nine M-en for fat-ed die-for
One Authority-for Dark Throne-dark-in
Dark-Land-in (Mordor) where Shadows lie.

One ring rule-to-them all,
One ring find-them,
One ring bind-to-them all,
And dark-ness-in find-them.

Dark-Land-in (Mordor) where Shadows lie.

*Alternatively, "Kuweden" can be used

Notes about my Namarië Valarin translation

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Additional meanings:

šebeth - wind (air)
aþar - year (festival)
rušur - to kindle, to set on fire (fire)
delgûmâ - hide, covering (roof)
phelûn - land, home (dwelling)

Invented words: (Underlined and bold words are coined by myself)

Aya - Exclaimation. From Quenya "ai!"
ullubân - Pour, fall (leaves). From Valarin "ul(l)u", water
ši - In, into. From Black Speech "ishi", in
wâ - No, not
lûnun - To count, amount
lûnun-al - countable
šarak - Wing
šarak-um - wings
wiyôz - Tree
win-um-ôz-al - trees-like
ullu-3ân - To flow. From Valarin "ul(l)u", water
ullu-3âš - flowed
kîna - Sweet
ôllonâz - Drink. Based on Valarin "ul(l)u", water
mirubhôzê3ôllonâz - mead drink. From Valarin "mirubhôzê", possibly mead (This website suggested that it was perhaps the beginning of a longer word, so this is my reconstruction)
ronokôz - Chamber, room. From Lower Black Speech "ronk", chamber
ronokumôz - rooms
ronâk - deep. From Lower Black Speech "ronk", chamber
Barâdâz - Varda, lofty, high, east (from the sun being "lifted" from the earth). From Quenya "Varda"
barâdal - lofty, high. From Quenya "Varda"
Barâdal - East, eastern. From Quenya "Varda"
baradâš - raised
utô - Beyond
Ezedâz - Rest, West. From Quenya "Estë" (from the sun "resting" into the earth as it sets west)
phela - Under, below. From Valarin "phelun", dwelling
axâzâz -  Hall
axâz-um-âz - halls
nûši - Where. "Nû" is invented. "Ši" is from Black Speech "ishi", in
azôz - Star (See "gil")
az-um-ôz - stars
gunûn-ân - Tremble
wâyôz - Song. From Quenya "Vairë" (in one way songs are carefully "woven" by writers into existence)
(u)mî - Her, she
akesa - Voice
manal - Holy. From Valarin "Mânawenûz", blessed one/one closest in accord with Eru
a3a - And. From Black Speech "agh"
Mâx-êz-imi - Queen. "Mâx" is from Valarin "Mâchanumâz", authorities. "Imi" is related to invented "mî", she
mâx-êz-imi-yal - of a queen, like a queen. "Mâx" is from Valarin "Mâchanumâz", authorities. "Imi" is related to invented "mî", she
nû3âz - Who
mir-ân - Fill. From Valarin "mirubhôzê"
paxîz - Cup
âzi - Me, I (feminine)
âzi-at - for me. "At" is from Black Speech "-at", to a purpose
Rušur-êz - Kindler. From Valarin "rušur", "uruš", fire
Gil - Star. From Quenya "Ilmarë"
Gil-um-âz - stars
thar - From
aþe - Hand
aþe-3um - hands
bânoyôz - Cloud
bâno-yum-ôz - clouds
ulan-um-ûkûz - All paths. "Ulan" is from Valarin "ul(l)u", water. "Ûkûz" is from Black Speech "-uk", all
duš-delgûm-âš - Hidden, lost. "Duš" is from Valarin "dušamanûðân", marred. "Delgûm" is from Valarin "delgûmâ", unknown meaning
gêrun - Mist
phelân-aišu - Lies, lurks. "Phelân" is from Valarin "Aþâraphelûn", appointed dwelling
yu - On
šoyaš-um - Waves. From Valarin "Ošošai", spuming, Ossë
to-yaran - Between us (us-between)
doše - Mist
akhi - Jewel
akhiyum - jewels
Têros - Pass, passage (as in mountains)
(a)mâz - Light. From Quenya "Ilmarë"
Têros-amâz-iyôz - Calacirya, the Pass of Light (Pass-light-of)
âxalli-yal - For ever
hay, hayâz - People. From Black Speech "hai" (as in "Uruk-hai"), folk
Balâz - Vala. From Sindarin "Balrog", Mighty demon; Quenya "Vala", Mighty, power; Primitive Elvish "Mbelek-óre", mighty rising
Bala3umâz - Valar
Phelûn-Bala3umâz - Valinor (Land-Valar)
Uti-gimab - Farewell (Good-find) - "Uti" is invented. "Gimab(ân)" is from Black Speech "gimb-". find
Maška - Perhaps
wî - You
wî-dai - even you (You-even)
tî - It

Suffixes:

- -um - -ness, -like. From Black Speech "-um", -ness (as in "burz-um", dark-ness)
-âz - (nominative)
-ân - (present tense verb) From Valarin "dušamanûðân", marred
-um (together with a word, before -z endings) - (plural)
-al - (adjective) From Valarin "amanaišal", unmarred
-ûðân - (past tense verb) From Valarin "dušamanûðân", marred
-at - to, for. From Black Speech "-at" (as in "durbatulûk"), to (a purpose)
-êz - one who does something. From Valarin "Arômêz", Oromë; "A3ûlêz", Aulë
-iyôz - of (something or someone)
-(i)mi - (feminine)
-(n)i (when used after a pronoun) - (feminine)
-en - again
-(a)yâ - shall
-ai - (present continuous) From Valarin "Ošošai", Ossë

Namarië in Valarin

Aya! Tulukh-um pathanumâz ullubân šebeth-ši,
aþarum wâ-lûnunal šarakum winumôzal!
Aþarum ullûðân mirubum-um šebethal-um
kînat mirubhôzê3ôllonâz ronokumôz-ši barâdal
utô Ezedâz, phela axâzumâz ulbanal Barâdâziyôz
nûši azumôz gunûnân wâyôz umî-3akesa-ši, manal a3a mâxêzimiyal.

Nû3âz mirân-en-yâ paxîz âzi-at?

Barâdâz Rušurêz, Gilumâz Mâxêzimi,
thar Dâhan-igwiš-telgûn baradûðân aþe3um bânoyumôz-um,
a3a ulanumûkûz dušdelgûmûðân pûruz-ši ronâk;
a3a gêrun phelûn ibrî pûruz phelânai yu šoyašum ošošai to-yaran,
a3a doše dušdelgûmûðân akhiyum Têros-amâziyôz âxalliyal.
Dušdelgûmûðân, dušdelgûmûðân Barâdal-hay-um-âz-at-thar Phelûn-Bala3umâz!
Utigimab! Maška wî gimabân-ayâ Phelûn-Bala3umâz
Maška wî-dai tî-gimabân-ayâ. Utigimab!

Literal translation:

Aya! Gold-like leav-es-like pour wind-in
Year-s not-number-adj wing-s tree-s-of-adj!
Year-s flow wine-s-like air-adj-like
sweet-for mead-drink room-s-in high-adj
beyond West, under hall-s blue-adj; Varda-of
where star-s tremble song her-voice-in, holy-adj and queenly.

Who pour-again-shall cup me(fem)-for?

Varda Alight-er, Star-s Queen,
from Taniquetil rais-ed hand-s cloud-s-like,
and path-s-all bad-hid-den dark-in deep;
and out land grey dark lie-s on wave-s foam-ing us-between,
and mist bad-hidden jewel-s Pass-Light-of forever.
Bad-hid-den, Bad-hid-den East adj-people-s-for from Land Vala-r!
Farewell! Perhaps you find-shall Land-Valar.
Perhaps you-even it-find-shall. Farewell!

Which horse are you?

1. Horse (Equus ferus caballus) Native to Eurasia, the planet Earth.

Normally, you would rather not fight, but leave for your precious life. While you may seem boring, "unintelligent", and ordinary, you nonetheless prefer survival over anything else. Nonetheless you take risks when they are necessary for a better future, while you are also content with your present age.

2. Houyhnhnm (Equus ferus houyhnhnmensis) Native to Houyhnhnm Land, an island south of Australia (Nuyts Land is at the southern coast) and west of Tasmania, the planet Earth.

(Image from Wikipedia)

Reason, reason, reason over the pleasures of all this world! You are very focused more on anything to do with science and high culture for the improvement of those around you -- however, sometimes you strive to improve them inconsiderately at their expense, as you get too caught up in your own goals. While you are doing well in keeping your emotions in check to prevent them from interrupting you, be careful not to over-work -- even a Houyhnhnm might, and can, go insane from boredom!

3. Equestrian pony (Mannulus equestrianensis) Native to Equestria, the planet Equestria.

(Image from Derpibooru.)

Emotion is king or queen in your life, and creativity your viceroy. You tend to be very moody and excitable, and you prefer to play around right now over a lifetime of boring drudgery. Sometimes, an idea would randomly spark into existence deep within your mind, providing something interesting for you and those whom you know. Perhaps a random brainstorm could help you when you have nothing to do, or when you are cornered.

4. Diomedian horse (Equus ferus caballus thracianensis) Native to Thrace (modern Bulgaria), the planet Earth.

(Image from Wikipedia)

You are ruthless, unforgiving, and furious. You would rather that people fear you, and to accept that you are always that angry. You might also have a penchant for destruction, as everyone else is either your victim, your servant, or your competition to destroy. Why not use your inner fire to smash through your obstacles, instead of risking yourself into serious trouble?

5. Unicorn (Equus monoceros) Native to Eastern Europe and India, the planet Earth.

(Image from Wikipedia)

Just as the horned horse goes toward virgin women, so are you bound to your own desires, even if they may be worthless for in the long run. Get out of your world of a shell, and you can at least see and witness more lovely things than what your own wants can give you alone.

6. Pegasus (Pegasus pegasus) Native to Greece, the planet Earth.

(Image from Wikipedia)

You could have used your abilities to fulfill your own ends, but you would rather use them wisely, either for the greater good, or for the task at hand (or hoof). People look up to you as an inspiration, a gifted trove of talents shining among the crowd -- still, be careful not to fall to the temptation of lifting yourself too high up, that your enemies will strike you down!

7. Ponyta (Pokemonus ponyta) Native to western Kanto, central Hoenn, Knot Island of the Sevii Islands, central Sinnoh, and northeastern Almia; Pokemon world.

(Original image from http://pldh.net/dex/sprites/ponyta)

You are very energetic and feisty, daring for a challenge or two. However, you might also seem foolhardy and brutish, simply charging and bashing your way against your problems rather than solving them carefully. Just think twice about your next move, and patiently for a more correct solution to your situation, will you?

8. Hippocampus (Hippocampus hippocampus) Native to the eastern Mediterranean, near Greece, and the central Atlantic Ocean; the planet Earth.

(Image from Wikipedia)

Just as the sky and sea become your limits, you might had some pressing disadvantage in your life. Yet you still try your best to overcome it, so that you can finish what is necessary, regardless of its power. Three cheers for you!

9. Kelpie (Kelpines kelpines) Native to Scotland, the planet Earth.

(Image from Kelpie Physiology, Superpower Wiki. Picture by porcelianDoll, DeviantArt.)

You are surely one nasty trickster, fooling others and causing them to land into trouble, all for laughs and all. Why not do something more useful to make your life more worthwhile? Surely life is too short for fun and games, for your treatment of others as your "tools" for mischief will one day bring you to ruin.

Neo-Valarin prefixes and suffixes, with others

(long vowel) -z - nominative e.g. A3ûlêz "crafter", *A3ûlân "to craft"
-unum-(suffix) - plural e.g. Ayanûz "Ainu", Ayan-um-ûz "Ainur"; Mâxanâz "Authority", Mâxan-um-âz "Authorities"

*-ân - present tense e.g. Akaš-ân "He [Eru Ilúvatar] says"
*-ûðân - past perfect tense ("has/had been X-ed") e.g. Dušaman-ûðân "marred, has been marred"
*-ai - present continuous tense ("-ing") e.g. Ošoš-ai "spuming, foaming"
*-aiš - simple past tense ("X was/used to be Y") e.g. Aman-aiš-al "unmarred, [that] used to be unmarred"

*-al - adjective e.g. Amanaiš-al "[it was] unmarred" *Aman-ân-al "[is] unmarred"

Assuming that Black Speech is actually a corrupted form of Valarin ("nazg/ring from anaškad, ghâsh/fire from igas/heat") with some other words thrown in, here are some words that are being reconstructed on that basis:

-ishi (in) - *-ši (in, into) | burzum-ishi (in the darkness) - *pûruz-umâz-ši (into the dark-ness)
-at- (to, for) - *-at- (to, for (this)) | krimp-at-ul (to bind them) - *girimaphân-at-ulûz (to bind them)

-ul (them) - *-ulûz (them, they) | gimb-at-ul (to find them) - *gimabân-at-ulûz (to find them)
-ûk (all) - *-ûkûz (all) | thrak-at-ul-ûk (to bring them all) - *aþarâkân-at-ul-ûkûz (to bring them all)
-ulûk (them all) - *ul-ûkûz (them all, all of them)

-um (ness) - *-umâz (-ness/-hood)
agh (and) - *a3a (and) | agh burz-um-ishi (and in the dark-ness) - *a3a pûruz-umâz-ši (and into the dark-ness)

Assuming that this Orcish variant of Black Speech is still Black Speech, we could attempt to reconstruct some more words for Valarin:

"Uglúk u bagronk sha pushdug Saruman-glob. Búb-hosh. skai!" (translation used from this section)

u (to) - *ut (to) | Uglúk u bagronk (Uglúk to the torture-chamber) - *Ugulûkûz ut baga-ronokôz (Uglúk [shall be sent] to the torture-room)
sha (with) - *šâ (with) | sha pushdug Saruman-glob (with stinking Saruman-fool) - *šâ gilobôz bušudugal Sarumanâz (with [the] stinking fool [of] Saruman/Curunir)

More Valarin reconstructed names

As for the Maiar, only Ošošai's (Ossë) Valarin name is known. Here are some Valarin names reconstructed for many of other known Maiar, helpers and servants of the Valar:

Noldorin Quenya - Neo-Valarin - Primitive Quenya/Valarin/other sources

Five Istari:

Olórin (Gandalf) - Ibrîgûlôz (silver servant) - Ibrî ("silver", from Ibrî-niðil-pathân-ezêl "*Silver-flower-leaf-green", Valarin); Gûl ("servant, wraith", from Nazgûl "Ring-wraith", Black Speech)
Curumo (Saruman) - Igwiša3ûlêz (white crafter) - Igwiš ("white"); A3ûlêz ("crafter", as Saruman was more into machines, being a Maia of Aulë, both Valarin)
Aiwendil (Radagast) - Âyawin-gimabâz (bird-finder) - Aiwē-n(d)il ("small bird-lover", Primitive Quenya); gimba- ("find", Black Speech, almost corresponding in function to "-ndil", in that Radagast seeks to see and be with the birds and wildlife of Aþâraphelûn)
Alatar or Morinehtar - Pûruzu-bagêz (darkness-destroyer) - Búrz ("darkness", Black Speech); bag ("torture", Lower Black Speech, third translation)
Pallando or Rómen(s)táro - Barâdâz-âyanâz (east/raised-helper) - Barâdâz ("raised", used for "east", as this is from where the Sun has been "raised" into the sky, Neo-Valarin from Primitive Quendi Baradá "lofty, sublime"); ayanûz ("Ainu", used for "worker", as the Ainur worked to create and sustain the universe, Eä, Valarin)

Evil Úmaiar:

Sauron - Aþa3uzônôz (the cruel) - Saura ("cruel", Primitive Quendi) and Þauza ("foul", possibly Vanyarin Quenya)
Mairon (Sauron) - Mayazônôz (the admirable) - Mairon ("admirable", Quenya)

Other Servants of the Good Valar:

Eönwë - I3ônowêz (herald) - (no known etymology)
Ilmarë - Gili-mâz (star-light) - *Gil(ma) ("starlight", GIL is related to the root for Ilmen, "Space (for stars)", Primitive Quendi and Quenya); -rë (feminine suffix)
Arien - Tulukh-igas (yellow-heat) - Tulukh ("yellow, gold"); Igas ("heat", both Valarin)
Tilion - Ibrî-3arôz (silver-horned) - Ibri ("silver"); Arôz ("horn", based on Arômêz, "horn-blower", both Valarin)
Uinen - Uyu-ninêz (seaweed-maiden) - *Uy ("seaweed", unknown non-Elvish language, possibly Valarin); *Nen ("water", Quenya)
Salmar - Salimâz (harp-man) - *Salma ("lyre, small harp", Quenya)

Reconstructed Valarin Names

We already have the original Valarin names for only four of the Valar: A3ûlêz, Arômêz, Mânawenûz, Tulukha(š)tâz, and Ul(l)ubôz. With some aspects of Tolkien's other languages, such as Khuzdul and Black Speech (itself partly based on corrupted Valarin), being reconstructed by people like David Salo, why not attampt to reconstruct the Valarin names of the other Valar as well?

Noldorin Quenya - Neo-Valarin (and meaning) - sources in Primitive Quendi

Varda - Barâdâz (raised, she-who-raises) - Barád/Baraþ (sublime, lofty)
Yavanna - Aya-banâz (fruit-giver) - Yab-an(t)a (fruit-giver)
Mandos - Mâna-dostôz (blessed keeper) - Man-dostŏ (custody-castle)
Námo - Nâmâz (judge) - Nam (judge, ordainer)
Nienna - Niyennâz (mourner) - Nei (tear)
Lórien - Lôriyenêz (dream-lander) - Lor (slumber, dream)
Irmo - Irimôz (desirer) - Írë-mo (desirer)  -  (the Primitive Quendi terms for this are lost, so Quenya terms from http://www.realelvish.net/book_names.php are used instead)
Estë - Ezedêz (rester) - Ezde (rest)
Vairë - Wiyarêz (weaver) - Wir/Wey, Weiré (Weaver, Weave)Vána - Wânâz (beautiful) - Wána (beauty) - (no Primitive Quendi term available)
Nessa - Neššai (vigourous) - Nessa (young) - (no Primitive Quendi term available)

Melkor - Belekôrôz (mighty-rising) - (M)Bel(ec) + órë (large, mighty + rising)